Sunday, May 2, 2010

Broadcast stories

2 Struck, killed by train in Richmond


AN ACCIDENT IN RICHMOND KILLED 2 PEOPLE WEDNESDAY, WHERE AUTHORITIES SAY THAT AN AMTRAK TRAIN STRUCK THE TWO VICTIMS.

ACCORDING TO AMTRAK SPOKESMAN, VERNAE GRAHAM, THE TWO WERE HIT AND KILLED NEAR THE INTERSECTION OF CARLSON BOULEVARD AND OHIO AVENUE, AT ABOUT 1:40 P.M., NOT FAR SOUTH OF THE RICHMOND AMTRAK STATION.

AFTER THE ACCIDENT, THE 39 PASSENGERS ON BOARD WERE ESCORTED ON FOOT TO THE STATION WHERE THEY WERE ABLE TO BOARD ANOTHER TRAIN.

THE VICTIMS HAVEN’T BEEN IDENTIFIED BUT AN INVESTIGATION OF THE CIRCUMSTANCES OF THEIR DEATHS IS UNDERWAY.

BOTH TRACKS NEAR THE ACCIDENT WERE LATER ABLE TO REOPEN AT 5:35 A.M. ALLOWING AMTRAK SERVICE TO RESUME.



Horse spotted running on Highway 17 found safe and sound



A HORSE RETURNED HOME TODAY AFTER BEING SPOTTED GALLOPING ON HIGHWAY 17 AFTER ESCAPING FROM HIS HOME NEAR LOS GATOS.

THE HORSE, A 22-YEAR OLD RESCUE ARABIAN NAMED STAR, WAS CAUGHT AT HOME ON KENT WAY, AFTER GALLOPING ON THE HIGHWAY, AND TAKEN TO AN ANIMAL SHELTER IN SAN MARTIN.

STAR REUNITED WITH HIS YOUNG 10 YEAR-OLD OWNER ATHENA MUZUMBAR AND HER FAMILY IN HIS HOME NEAR A CORRAL PROPERTY SOUTH OF LOS GATOS OWNED BY SUZANNE CRISTALLO.

THE HUMANE SOCIETY WAS ORIGINALLY RELUCTANT TO RELEASE STAR BACK TO HIS FAMILY BECAUSE OF SUSPICION OF MISTREATMENT BUT AFTER SPEAKING WITH THE MUZUBAR’S, WHO HAD THE PREVIOUS OWNER CALL THEM ABOUT STAR’S HEALTH PROBLEMS THEY ALLOWED HIM TO RETURN HOME.

ACCORDING TO CRISTALLO, THE CULPRITE BEHIND STAR’S ESCAPE COULD BE A PONY NAMED OREO WHO LIKES TO SLIDE OPEN METAL LOCKS ON METAL GATES THAT CORRAL HORSES.

IT SEEMED THEN THAT STAR TOOK HIS CHANCE RUN WILD BECAUSE HE’S NEW TO THE FARM AND ACCORDING TO CRISTALLO STILL HAD QUOTE “NO ALLEGIANCE TO THE HEARD.”

STAR’S OWNER ATHENA SAYS SHE’S HAPPY TO HAVE HER HORSE BACK AFTER THE BRIEF SCARE.

1 comment:

  1. Train story: 8/10
    * needs time signature
    * tighten up your lead
    * TWO PEOPLE
    * last paragraph is redundant (reopen/resume)

    Horse story: 16/20

    Tighten up: A HORSE RETURNED HOME TODAY AFTER GALLOPING DOWN HIGHWAY 17 AFTER ESCAPING FROM HIS STABLE NEAR LOS GATOS.

    P3: That's one wickedly long sentence. Tighten it up; split it up.

    * CULPRIT (not CULPRITE)
    * TO THE HERD (not HEARD).”

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